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Using the bystander effect in your novels

Take a look at that picture. What do you see in it? A street scene. Tumbled flats of vegetables, corn, green beans, and what look like cucumbers spilled on the pavement. People walking past. What don’t you see? Anybody lifting a finger to help clean it up. The original picture this one was cropped from has over a dozen people in it, and every one of them is probably thinking something along the lines of “Ooh, glad that’s not my problem.”

That’s the bystander effect. It is the tendency for people to offer less help to strangers the more other people are around. The ironic thing is that if there had been only one other person on the street when this little accident took place, that person would have been much more likely to step in and offer assistance.

Why does it happen?

The reasons behind it are pretty straightforward, and psychologists seem to be of the impression that a number of factors contribute to the bystander effect. One is “diffusion of responsibility” (don’t you just love the fancy names psychologists come up with for everything?): not doing anything because you figure surely someone else will. Another is social proof: when confronted with an emergency situation, people’s initial reaction is to look around to see how other people are responding in order to decide how to respond. So everyone looks around, and sees everyone else also just looking around—that is, not doing anything because they’re also busy making the same internal assessment—and decides that the situation must not be all that serious. A third is uncertainty and fear, not being confident of one’s ability to actually help, or to help in a way that the help-ee will actually appreciate. These are all pretty normal feelings, but they all add up to folks not helping other folks as much as we might hope.

So what can you do with it in your novels? Three things, which revolve around the different roles present in these kinds of situations:

Victim

As I’ve counseled many times before, it’s good to do bad things to your main characters, so your poor protagonists may well be the ones in a scene who would like some help.

If you’re writing in an intimate point of view, either first person or third-person limited, then the POV character is the stand-in for the reader. This creates a wonderful opportunity to create reader empathy: Let the POV character need help, but not get any. Let any bystanders in the scene, well, stand by. If you portray the POV character’s need for help as well as his or her growing sense of desperation as nobody steps up to offer that help, you can really put readers on the edge of their seats. Basically, by giving readers enough information to understand that the emergency situation really is an emergency—that help is genuinely needed—they’ll be just as frustrated at the useless bystanders as your POV character.

This can work really well in an opening scene, as a means for quickly bonding the reader to your POV characters in order that the reader cares what happens to them. You need to be careful not to let your POV characters be so utterly helpless and pathetic that readers can’t root for them—which probably means letting your characters solve their own problems after failing to get help from anybody else—but it can be a great way to create a character-based hook for a novel.

Useless bystander

On the flip-side, you might put a POV character into the useless bystander role. Why might you do this? Because it works well in the early chapters of novels that are driven by inner character arcs as a way to drive home the character’s starting point. When you have a character who is going to experience some kind of inner growth as the story progresses, you need a way to show that they are presently in an emotionally blocked or stunted state. Showing that POV character being unable to render aid and assistance can achieve this.

Be careful, though; there is an obvious danger. It’s easy for readers to decide they don’t like a character who sees someone in need but decides not to help. The way around this pitfall is to make sure the reader understands two things: why the POV character cannot help, and that the POV character feels bad about it. You have to let the reader into the character’s head enough to see the character’s internal debate over whether to help, enough to help the reader understand the choice not to, and enough to see that despite that choice the character would have liked to help. Show us the character’s impulses towards helping, and the counter-impulses against helping. If you show us the struggle, we’re more likely to feel positively towards the character even though the character’s better nature loses.

Which is kind of the point. It’s that very self-defeat by one’s own inner demons that sets the stage for the book’s inner character arc.

Hero

Lastly, of course, there’s the hero. The bystander who doesn’t merely stand by, but in fact goes to the aid of the person in need. If you’re writing some kind of action/adventure book, you’re in very good company by using this technique to build up your character as a heroic figure. How many books have we seen that involve some variant on POV characters rescuing kittens from trees, chasing down muggers in order to return an old lady’s purse, et cetera? It’s common, because it works, but I caution you to be careful here, too.

The common-ness of this technique pushes it dangerously close to cliche territory. Further, it’s very easy to overdo it and end up with an implausibly melodramatic result. That’s fine, if you’re writing a tongue-in-cheek superhero novel or something, but most of the time it damages the reader’s belief in the character. I mean, sure, real life does have its selfless heroes who, without hesitation, run into burning buildings or dive into flood-swollen rivers to save other people.

But most novels need something a little more tame in order for readers to believe in the character as a real person, and that something is exactly what those real-life heroes don’t have: hesitation. Again, it’s all about letting the reader into the character’s head. For my money, you get a much more believable and sympathetic hero if you show the character’s internal debate about helping. The only difference between the hero, then, and the useless bystander is which side of the character’s personality wins the debate. So let us see the character asking himself, “Does that person really need help? Should I jump in? The character is a proxy for the reader here, too, so it’s very helpful to show the character asking himself the same kinds of questions readers would be asking themselves in that situation.

Then, all you need is something to break that internal logjam in favor of acting. It could be anything. Empathy for the victim because the hero suffered a similar problem in the past isn’t bad, if a little cliched still. For male POV character’s, there’s always the allure of playing the hero in order to impress a girl. That always works. But my favorite reason to jump in is frustration at not seeing anybody else jump in. You take the POV character from seeing the situation and thinking “gosh, somebody should really help that person,” to wondering “why is nobody helping?” and finally to “Dammit! I guess I’ll help, then!”

Conclusion

So, there you go. The bystander effect, and three ways to make it work for you in your novels. I’m curious to know, is this something you’ve used in your novels before? Is it something that could help your current work-in-progress? Tell us about it down in the comments!

August 03, 2010 21:34 UTC

Tags: character, bystander effect, victim, hero, sympathy, inner character arc

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5 Comments:

Posted by Lexi Revellian on August 04, 2010 09:31 UTC

I watched a fascinating programme about this. Pretty depressing in parts; a young teenager was badly beaten up in a bus, and no one did anything to help her. She lost her faith in humanity that night.

Another man went to the rescue of a man on the ground being brutally kicked by two assailants. The scene had been caught on CCTV. What struck me was his slowness and hesitancy - the victim was hugely grateful, as he’d saved his life, but the scene didn’t look anything like the movies.

I remember hearing about Boris Yeltsin climbing on a tank to rally the people during an attempted coup. I pictured him leaping up in heroic mode; then I saw it on television. A middle-aged man in a crumpled suit, clambering carefully, clumsily up the tank, clearly worried about falling off.

Perhaps we should try to narrow the gap between fact and fiction.

Posted by Jason Black on August 04, 2010 17:28 UTC

@Lexi:

If you mean by that bringing fact closer to fiction, rather than the other way around, I wholeheartedly agree. To the extent that fiction can inspire people towards different ways of being and to making different choices in their own lives, we writers do have an opportunity (or is it a duty?) to explore the full range of human behavior so as to give readers the chance to live (however vicariously) other lives. To help readers try on other personas, as it were, to see how it feels to be an unusually generous person, a stingy one, a helpful one, an indifferent one, and so on.

This opportunity is a fringe benefit to the act of novel writing (those who try to turn it into the principal reason for writing a novel usually end up with preachy, heavy-handed, moralistic novels nobody wants to read), but when treated with a light touch is a fringe benefit we shouldn’t discount.

Posted by Glynis Smy on August 07, 2010 15:41 UTC

Many years ago, I would have dived in and helped. Then came lawsuits and the art of suing. As a qualified nurse, I hesitated to dive in as before. The minute I touched a person I became responsible for their well being. If I had done something wrong, I could have been sued.

Your post gave me a chapter idea for my second novel,(planning stage). Thanks for an interesting read.

Posted by Jason Black on August 08, 2010 03:21 UTC

@Glynis: Thank you for adding that comment. When I was researching this article, I did come across that very fear—fear of liability and litigation—as one of the explanations for the bystander effect. I debated adding it to the article, but didn’t as it was getting kind of long as it was.

What I did discover is that some places have good samaritan laws which either limit liability for anyone who is making a good-faith effort to help (as in California) or conversely make it a crime NOT to offer aid.

In as much as I think we could use more good samaritans, perhaps we need more such laws. Thanks for sharing your story.

Posted by Sandy on August 16, 2010 00:42 UTC

Excellent post.

It gave me some ideas for the future. Unfortunately, I’m too far along with my present wip’s to use anything new for now.

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