What Star Wars teaches us about character introductions
In real life, we make judgments about people, often within mere seconds of meeting them. Those judgments, whether right or wrong, are incredibly difficult to change later on. You don’t, as the saying goes, get a second chance to make a first impression.
The same is true in our books. Scenes where we introduce readers to new characters are tough to do well, because we don’t get much space to play with before readers make up their minds. Not many paragraphs pass before readers decide whether they like, loathe, admire, or pity a new character. So we have to act fast.
Star Wars is a great example of how to do this well, and exhibits most of the core techniques I want to talk about. Star Wars (and I’m talking about Episode IV, here) manages to convey to us, in very short amounts of screen-time, the essential nature of all of its main characters and shows them to be unique, distinctive individuals. We can take some lessons there as to how to effectively introduce our own books’ characters.
Show them in action
When introducing a protagonist or other POV character, consider showing them in action. By this I mean putting the character in a scene where he or she has to actually do something. Make it a situation where the character has to make some kind of choice and take some kind of action (preferably, a difficult choice and an unpleasant action) in order to affect the outcome of the situation.
Early on in Princess Leia’s introduction—it’s not her first scene, but it’s close—she is faced with a no-win choice: give up the location of the rebel base, or see her home planet of Alderaan destroyed. We can see how difficult a choice it is for her, through her visceral, bodily reactions. She’s heartbroken to betray the rebellion, but she can’t let an entire planet’s population be eradicated either. It’s an impossible choice, but she makes a choice anyway, and we see the pain of it in the down-turn of her face, the slump of her shoulders.
What does it tell us about her? It tells us that she’s an important person within the world of the movie. It tells us that she is fundamentally a protective, nurturing person, in as much as she tries to protect the people of Alderaan even though she must make a huge sacrifice in the attempt. The scene portrays her as a deeply sympathetic character. But note—and this is important—the sympathy comes not from the choice itself but from how she feels about it, which we viewers read through her body language. Had she treated the choice differently, in a casual or cavalier manner ("Well, Tarkin, I can’t have you blowing up a whole planet, so hey, the rebels are on Dantooine. Go get ‘em, big guy!") we’d have had an entirely different feeling about her.
Show them in conflict
One of Luke Skywalker’s first scenes is a minor conflict between him and his Uncle Owen. We meet Luke in the scene where the Jawas sell R2-D2 and C-3PO to Luke’s family. Having made their purchases, Uncle Owen tells Luke to get the new droids cleaned up. Luke replies with:
But I was going into Toshi Station to pick up some power converters...
Epic whine. A whine that will go down in history. But, he obeys his Uncle. What’s going on here from a character perspective? We’re being shown that Luke is a relatively powerless figure. He has no authority, and little control over his life. Physically, we can see that he’s a very young man, so this makes sense and is something most viewers can empathize with. We’ve all felt that way from time to time. That’s the sympathetic hook of Luke’s character. But it also shows us that he’s not satisfied with the life he lives. He rankles at the limitations of both the life he lives and the place he lives it. As he remarks to C-3PO:
Well, if there’s a bright center to the universe, you’re on the planet that it’s farthest from.
Conflict is a wonderful way to bring a character’s deeper motivations up to the surface where we can see them. Whether those motivations come out through dialogue (as they do here), through choices made as the conflict progresses, conflict is a great way to let us know what really drives your characters.
Show them using key skills, attitudes, hobbies, et cetera
We first meet “Old Ben” Kenobi, the “crazy old wizard” after Luke gets his butt kicked by the Tusken Raiders. (Side note: Luke clearly loses that conflict, which greatly re-enforces his powerlessness.) Kenobi comes breezing into the canyon, his brown robes flowing in the breeze, and the raiders all take off. Young, strong, able-bodied Luke was child’s play for the raiders, but creaky old Ben Kenobi scares them off without so much as breaking a sweat.
It’s not difficult to understand that this Kenobi guy must have something going for him. He’s got some kind of mystic juju going on in that scene which is nothing to sneeze at. At that point in the movie, we have no idea what his deal is, not yet, but we get it: he’s a powerful figure. His subsequent dialogue with Luke further reveals him to be both kindly and wise.
In hero’s journey terms (and Star Wars is definitely a hero’s journey story), even in this short introductory scene Kenobi is an obvious fit to be the story’s mentor character.
Use vivid imagery
Don’t discount a vivid set of visuals to introduce a character, either. Like Darth Vader. Even without John William’s unforgettable musical theme for Vader, we know he’s a total badass from the moment he steps into the smoke-filled corridor of Princess Leia’s spacecraft. His imposing physical stature, jet black outfit, and billowing cape all speak of power. The symbology is not subtle at all, but it is pulled off with such panache that the overall impression is powerfully striking.
Show other characters’ reactions
Speaking of Vader, he’s also a great example of how other characters’ reactions can show the viewer (or reader) a more complete picture. He shows his face—well, his mask anyway—and storm-troopers snap to attention along the corridor’s walls. They make room for him to pass. Rebel soldiers avert their eyes and clasp their hands behind their heads. Those reactions, even though they come from nameless (and for the stormtroopers, literally faceless) extras, tell us everything we need to know about Vader. When Vader steps into that corridor, he’s the man. He’s in complete control of the situation, and no one is about to defy him.
Except, getting back to her for a moment, Princess Leia. And what does that tell us about her? That she’s strong, oh so strong, and indomitable.
Make use of setting
Where we meet characters says a lot about them too. We meet Luke out in the ass-end of nowhere on his Uncle’s moisture farm. He could scarcely be in a less influential setting. It’s a great setup for Luke, because for him Star Wars: A New Hope is a fish-out-of-water story. He’s the backwater nobody who finds himself suddenly thrust into the middle of hugely important, high stakes events. That we meet him in such an inauspicious location, and particularly since the previous scenes involved spaceships and Very Important People, shows us exactly the degree to which Luke is going to be an unlikely hero, bumbling through very much out of his depth.
Han Solo’s introduction is also rich with setting. We meet him in the practically the sleaziest dive bar in the galaxy. That alone sets him up as an unsavory rogue character. We then see him shoot his way out of an encounter with a bounty hunter, and with more than his share of casual bravado, establish that he is as much in control within this environment as Vader was back on Leia’s spaceship. We’re also left with no uncertainty that this Han Solo guy is likely the worst of possible choices Luke and Ben have at their disposal for getting off Tattooine, except that he’s their only choice. His roguishness, established as much by the setting as his actions, works to sell the desperate circumstances Luke and Ben are in.
Note, too, that this is a perfect introduction for Han Solo in terms of setting up his overall character arc. He flips from being an indifferent mercenary figure to being an active ally to the rebellion. And in later movies, he shows his softer side, his willingness to take risks for those he cares about, and so forth. His arc is all about that shift from being a self-centered opportunist, to a more idealistic supporter of a cause that is larger than himself. For that to work, we have to meet him while he’s still a pompous jackass, and the Mos Eisly cantina scene is a great setting to establish that as a starting point for him.
Drop some hints about backstory
The opportunity of meeting a new character is not an excuse to tell us their life’s story. It is not an occasion to indulge in a massive backstory infodump. Don’t go there. Just don’t.
It is, however, an opportunity to create some mystery by hinting at interesting elements of backstory. The opportunity of meeting a new character is to raise some compelling questions in the reader’s mind which you can then explore more fully as the story moves on.
Darth Vader’s physical form hints at significant backstory. From the first second we see him, he is obviously a physically powerful character. And yet, there’s that mechanical, raspy breathing that hints at an underlying frailty. He’s got machines and blinking lights all over his chest. You cannot help but look at him and wonder What’s under the mask? And how did he get to be that way?
When we meet Luke Skywalker, it’s in the context of his aunt and uncle. The dialogue takes particular care to give us their names, Aunt Beru and Uncle Owen. Shortly thereafter, we see that he doesn’t simply work on their farm, he lives with them. The subtext of the conversation where his Uncle refuses to let Luke send in his application to the Academy tells us that they are his caregivers and surrogate parents. So we wonder Why is he living with them? What happened to his real parents? We’re not given some kind of heavy-handed flashback montage showing us what happened to Luke’s parents (we had to wait 20+ years and five more movies to really understand that), but we are given hints that there is a compelling backstory there.
When we meet Obi Wan and come to understand that he isn’t just a crazy old man like Uncle Owen told Luke, that he does have some kind of power, we’re forced to wonder What the heck he’s doing living out in the middle of a nowhere desert?
We’re forced to wonder. And because of that curiosity, we’re compelled to keep watching. It works in books, too.
The number-one job of a character introduction
If I can sum all this up, my advice would be this: Craft your character introductions to tell us what’s most important about that person. You don’t get much space before the reader’s first impression is set, so make it count. Concentrate on conveying the one thing you most want us to believe about that character.
And make it something good, because above all, we need a reason to be interested. Give us some reason to love, to hate, to admire, or to pity the character. As long as we feel something about the person, we’ll read on. As long as we’re interested in who they are, we’ll be interested in what happens to them. The second we realize there’s nothing about a character that interests us (usually because the writer has left them too opaque), we lose interest in the story itself.
July 30, 2010 19:00 UTC
20 Comments:
Posted by @jmartinlibrary on July 31, 2010 22:41 UTC
I think this is probably the best post on characterization and first impressions I’ve ever read. Seriously.
By dissecting those moments, I was able to apply some the of the insights to my first pages of revisions today.
Thanks!
Posted by Jessie Mac on August 01, 2010 00:12 UTC
I love Star Wars. Thanks for the extensive points on character. Your post will help a lot when I get to editing and double-checking.
Posted by Jason Black on August 01, 2010 03:00 UTC
@Gwen — It can be a tough balance to find. In that introduction scene, we need to remember that real people don’t walk around with “my life’s story” floating in glowing letters above their heads. So, minimize backstory. But at the same time, we still need to portray something that’s going to get the reader’s attention.
It’s one of those facets of novel-writing where I really wish there was a formula for figuring out exactly how to introduce each character. But there’s not. It’s always hugely affected by the circumstance in which the character introduction takes place, what’s actually interesting about the character, how you envision the character’s arc developing, et cetera. There’s not much more we can do, I think, than keep some general principles in mind and then figure it out on a case by case basis.
@Jmartinlibrary Thanks very much! That’s high praise, indeed. Glad you enjoyed the article.
And @Jessie Mac, I’m delighted to have helped. That’s what my blog is for, to help writers learn practical, hands-on techniques for effective character development.
Posted by Terry Odell on August 02, 2010 15:57 UTC
Excellent! This goes right along with an example I picked up in a workshop by author Martha Powers. You have to lay the foundations for the characters skill set. She used the first Indiana Jones movie, pointing out that had it started in the classroom, nobody would have believed Indy could do what he had to do in the rest of the movie. (And there was that great snake foreshadowing, too)
As for back story, I’ve been told to consider it “first meet at a cocktail party” conversation, or an IV drip.
Posted by Eric J. Krause on September 09, 2010 18:54 UTC
Excellent article. Great points throughout, and done in an entertaining way. As a huge Star Wars fan (and a writer), I was able to pick out some excellent ideas that I hadn’t really thought of before, but when you lay them out in such a manner, made me agree wholeheartedly.
Posted by Jason Black on September 09, 2010 19:30 UTC
@Eric — Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it. I find I can never stay too far away from Star Wars. :)
Posted by christine danek on October 08, 2010 12:21 UTC
This is a great article. I’m a writer and a big fan of Star Wars. These examples helped me understand your points clearly. Thanks.
Posted by Susan Kaye Quinn on October 08, 2010 17:25 UTC
Fantastic post! I hopped over from Stina’s blog, and so glad I did! I’m a new follower.
Posted by Janet Johnson on October 09, 2010 00:51 UTC
Great post! And I love the use of Star Wars. Epic story. Epic influence. Thanks for breaking it all down.
Posted by Jason Black on October 09, 2010 15:38 UTC
Glad you both liked it! I find I can never stay too far away from Star Wars...
Posted by Rachel Harris on January 25, 2011 15:28 UTC
Awesome post. I’m tweeting this one! I tried to take notes off of it for ideas in beginning my new work in progress and ended up almost copying the whole thing into my writing notebook. :-)
Posted by Jason Black on January 25, 2011 17:10 UTC
@Rachel—
Glad you enjoyed it! The early Star Wars movies are such a rich lode of storytelling and characterization wisdom, it’s always fun to go back and mine them for more secrets.
It does make one shake one’s head and wonder what the heck happened to George Lucas in the years between Jedi and Phantom Menace. It’s like someone lobotomized the storytelling genius part of his brain...
Posted by Lois Moss on January 26, 2011 12:58 UTC
Fantastic post. I’m going to have to start following your posts. This is a gold mine.
Posted by Joy on January 30, 2011 13:56 UTC
Jason.... C’mon... I was so very interested in your editing services until I got to this line:
“Scenes were we introduce readers to new characters are tough to do well, because we don’t get much space to play with before readers make up their mind.”
If you are going to charge someone to catch their spelling errors, it would be in your favor to catch your own. And this has been there a while. If you in turn use an editor for your site, time to dock their pay :)
Seriously though, you offer a great alternative to having to choose from the limited number of local wordsmiths where I live.
Thanks ☺
Posted by Jason Black on January 31, 2011 03:56 UTC
@Joy—
Well, typos get past the best of us. Fixed now.
But, in my defense, I must say that about 98% of what I do for clients isn’t copy editing. It’s substantive critique and analysis, for which my ability to type accurately isn’t remotely as important as my ability to do the kind of narrative deconstruction that, for example, goes into posts like this one. :)
Posted by Beth on February 09, 2011 21:03 UTC
Great post (ahem, now that the typo is fixed). My last book came within a whisker of confusing “hoard” with “horde". Happens to the best of us.
Posted by Scott on August 27, 2011 19:20 UTC
question: I need to show that my protagonist is a likeable person that my audience can root for, but the flaw he sees in himself and slowly learns to correct is vindictiveness. But nobody likes vindictive people. How do I show his vindictiveness early in the story without losing his likeability?
Posted by Jason Black on August 27, 2011 21:16 UTC
@Scott—
I think your question contains its own answer. Buried a little, but it’s in there. Your question amounts to “how can I get people to like a vindictive character who nobody will like.” If the character is indeed a vindictive person, then it’s not really fair to ask readers to like him right off.
Fortunately, you don’t need them to like him. What you need is for them to, as you say, root for him. And who do readers like to root for? Underdogs.
Basically, don’t let us see the vindictiveness right away. Before that, give us a scene in which your protagonist gets screwed, gets the short end of the stick, gets his butt kicked. Something along those lines. Show him being, in some preferrably humiliating kind of way, bested.
If that’s what we see first, notice how it plays into the vindictiveness that will be at the heart of the story. Whatever happens in that opening scene to humiliate or embarass him will serve as the launching point for an episode of vindictiveness. We’ll understand that. We all wish we could take revenge against those who get the better of us. We fantasize about it. But this character, then, actually does it. He actually takes steps to punish whomever he feels wronged him.
I think that could work very well, because after the initial humiliation, readers will be practically eager for him to get back at his enemy. A little vengeance is fun. But what you’ll give us, what we’ll actually see, is that he takes it too far. He pushes the getting-back into a dark, nasty, spiteful place. That’s vindictiveness, and at that point we’ll understand what kind of a guy this is.
Of course, by that time we’re probably 20 or 30 pages into the story, and now we’re invested in this character. That’s also plenty of space in which to hint about other, potentially redeeming, qualities he might have.
Thanks for your comment, and I hope that helps!
Posted by Scott on August 29, 2011 00:44 UTC
Thanks, Jason. I see your point. If my character feels that he’s justified in his actions because he’s been wronged, then I just need the audience to see what he sees. It’s like in Fargo, where we see William H Macy’s desperation and it makes us root for him to succeed and get out from under the debts, even though his plan itself is pretty well unconscionable. Thanks again.



Posted by Gwen Hernandez on July 31, 2010 17:49 UTC
Great stuff, as usual. I can always use the reminder not to give away too much too early. I sometimes forget that when we meet people in real life, we learn their story over time as we get to know them. I need to keep this in mind when writing too. Thanks!